Revenge Inflation

Date Written: 
07/26/2016

Anna had always been pushed around by Terry, because Terry believes that she's better than everyone else. Terry would always tear into Anna apart anywhere. No matter what Anna does to prove herself to Terry, Terry destroys her for it. 

"Today it ends" Anna tells herself.

She arrives at Terry's house, Anna unloads the boxes from the UHUAL van into the kitchen. 

"Anna! Get in here! Now!" Terry screams from her room.

Anna walks in to find Terry laying in bed, with her bloated belly protruding out and over her clothes. She takes a deep breath and approches Terry.

"Yes Terry, what's wrong?" Anna asks.

"I need you to tighten my belt and put my corset on, and where have you been?" She asks. 

Anna tightens Terry's belt and puts her corset on, unfortunately Terry's belly is so bloated from her 12,000 calorie breakfast and lunch. 

"Uh Terry, you're belly is too bloated to put your corset on. Hell look! Barely any of your belly fits in this stupid thing" Anna explains.

"You stupid bitch! Just make this work!" Terry screams at Anna.

Anna has reached her breaking point, so she jumps on top of Terry's bloated gut and handcuffs her to her bed. 

"Ahh!! Anna what the fuck are you doing to me you stupid worthless cunt?" Terry protests to Anna.

"Revenge, Terry. It's simple you're going to pay for everything you've ever done to me, today." Anna smiles while blind folding Terry.

Anna heads to the kitchen and carries in 5 of the boxes to Terry's room.

"What-what are you going to do with me Anna?" Terry asks in fear.

"Well Terry, that's a surpise, and I don't believe in ruining surpises." Anna explains as she connects a few hoses. 

Anna take the largest hose and shoves it up Terry's ass, and then takes a thick, long, large belt to hold Terry down to the bed.

"Terry once I flip this switch, you'll be larger than life!" Anna laughs as she turns on the air compressor. 

"Please Anna stop this! Ow! What's happening to me?" Terry screams.

"You're inflating," Anna says, "and you're going to keep inflating until I deem that your full." 

Terry's belly slowly starts to balloon outward, "Oh Terry! I have another surprise for you!" Anna laughs. 

Anna takes a funnel and forces it down Terry's throat, and tapes in place. She grabs 50 rolls of mint Mentos and starts dropping them into the funnel. Then Anna grabs a 2-liter of diet coke, and pours the coke down the funnel, and continues to pour bottle after bottle down the funnel. 

"Isn't this fun Terry! Look at your belly! Oh wait hold on, see?" Anna smirks.

Terry's eyes triple in size at the horror of her belly growing at an abnormally rapid rate. Anna removes the funnel, "why? Anna why?" Terry moans in pain.

"Revenge like I said before, and I'm not done yet!" Anna says as she turns off the air compressor.

"Thank you, ow! Why am I still growing? What did you do?" Terry screams as the belt cuts deeper and deeper into Terry's rapidly expanding midsection.

"Coke and mentos." Anna replies.

Terry looks on in horror and pain as she continues to swell.

SNAP!

The belt on the bed snaps off, and Terry's belly springs forward like a rocket. 

"Ah, the pressure." Terry moans.

"Awe are you feeling full?" She asks Terry.

"Yes! Please make it stop! I'm going to explode!" Terry cries.

"You're not full yet! And you're not going to explode..." Anna sighs.

Anna turns the air compressor back on and grabs a bike pump; since Terry's belly is still soft and squishy. "You're not growing enough Terry, I need to fix that. I want you to be a balloon, bigger than any of the Macy parade balloons" Anna explains as she climbs onto Terry's belly. 

"Please Anna, I'll be nice to you! I stop treating you like shit, forever! Please just stop this!" Terry begs.

"Woah!" Anna exclaims as Terry's belly bulges forward and begins rounding out. "Finally your rounding out, let's speed this up" Anna says taking the bike pump and shoving the hose into Terry's deep navel.

"Ow! Hey what the?" Terry screams.

Anna starts pumping furiously, as Terry swells more and more.  

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Average: 1.9 (13 votes)
airtankgirl5
airtankgirl5's picture
Weird tense

Not my cup of bubble tea, so I'll make no comment on the content.

Form on the other hand:  the third person, present tense is really awkward. A number of spelling and grammatical errors (your/ you're).  While it's good that you didn't fall into the wall of text trap that some writers do, you seem to have gone the other direction and made the story told largely in single sentances, which is almost as distracting as telling it all in one paragraph.  

hfilled
Seconded.  Try third person

Seconded.  Try third person past tense.  

Inflate123
Inflate123's picture
Typos and grammatical errors

Typos and grammatical errors are distracting (your vs you're, for instance). There's very little description of the inflation process or the characters themselves. This feels like an outline that can be developed and polished. 

85nobdss (not verified)
Okay, I'd like to bring

Okay, I'd like to bring something up. This is not story related. On this site, there are a lot of story critics but not a lot of art critics (almost none). What is up with that?