My first story...

I decided to give writing an expansion story a shot.  Tried to make it a little different than the normal fare.  Constructive criticism is welcomed.

http://oh2bpreg.deviantart.com/#/d5ptoz4

Deep_Breath_In

Hi oh2bpreg,

I hope to read and enjou your story when it comes out. 

If you're turned on by the idea of a girl turning herself into a balloon by taking a really deep breath, this is the guy to talk to.

Take a deep breath in. You'll need it.